Kimagure Orange Road "Private Memory" Volume 8, Story 1 WB Volume 4, Story 14 Written and illustrated by Matsumoto Izumi Translation by : Hitoshi Doi (12 November 1989) Additional translation by : Craig Nishida Compilation by : Spencer C. Hastings Editing and Additional help by : Paul Hirose Craig Nishida Spencer Hastings Thomas Wyatt Jerry Lee Jordan Lampe Last revision : 07-03-95 Comments? Corrections? Suggestions? Please send them to: kor-trans@gnu.ai.mit.edu NOTE: WBp#'s are printed first, Normal manga pages in parentheses() NOTE: Translation is done from the WB manga, so there may be a few extras to those of you not having them. Example: The subtitles on page 283 (7) are only in the WBs! --------------------------------------------------- p 283 (7)--TITLE PAGE [Full-portrait of Madoka. She stands in a white dress, a bow in her hair, lifting her long skirts, as though preparing to curtsy.] MAIN TITLE (at top) Private Memory SUB-TITLE (at bottom) When She Spreads Her Beating Wings, She Looks As Though She's Become a Wonderful Actress, and the Bell Rings for the Rising of the Curtain of Love. --------------------------------------------------- p 284 (8) 1 [Hikaru's pov of a somewhat startled Kyousuke.] Hikaru: [off] Sempai, today I want you... 2 [His pov of Hikaru, who shouts vehemently, face flushed and hands covering her ears.] Hikaru: ...to choose. 3 Hikaru: [with a gentle smile and a wink] Please keep it a secret from Madoka-san that you chose me! --------------------------------------------------- p 285 (9) 1 [His pov of Madoka, who looks back without expression.] Madoka: And...? 2 [Madoka's pov of Kyousuke, nervous and with eyes downcast.] Kyousuke: I-I'm sorry. 3 Madoka: I'm tired of hearing excuses! 4 Kyousuke: [in loud anguish] (I-it's all over-r-r!!) --------------------------------------------------- p 286 (10) 1 [A hand shakes the shoulder of Kyousuke, who sits asleep at his desk in class.] Kyousuke: I-it's... Sensei: [off] Kasuga-kun. Kasuga-kun. 2 [Kyousuke suddenly leaps to his feet, with a tortured shriek. The teacher leaps back in shock.] Kyousuke: ...ALL OVERRRRR!! Kyousuke FX: 3 [He realizes where he is...] Kyousuke: AH! 4 sensei: That's certainly true, class is now over for today, but... dramatic FX: sensei: The class bell is not an alarm clock! [His classmates laugh as Kyousuke hangs his head in embarrassment.] 5 narration: Oh, it was a premonition dream... Kyousuke: (That's good!) 6 [Kyousuke's eyes grow large as he reflects on what he said.] 7 Kyousuke: (No, that's NOT good!!) --------------------------------------------------- p 287 (11) 1 [Kyousuke and Madoka walk home from school.] Madoka: What's all over? traffic light sign: Shimazawa, City Block 5 2 Madoka: Were you dreaming about the test? 3 narration: If only it was the test. 4 Kyousuke: (But why was it like that...?) (Hmm, I don't get it.) 5 [Flashback pic of Hikaru shouting with hands over her ears.] narration: I was pressured into choosing by Hikaru-chan... 6 [Flashback pic of Hikaru gently smiling and winking at him.] narration: And I chose Hikaru-chan... 7 [Flashback pic of a terse Madoka saying she's tired of hearing excuses. Splashed over this is a wide-eyed Kyousuke.] narration: Th-this is...?! --------------------------------------------------- p 288 (12) 1 Kyousuke: (I'd like to avoid that!) 2 narration: Then there's only one solution! Kyousuke: [turning towards Madoka] AYUKAWA!! 3 [Displaying rare decisiveness, he takes her by the hand, stares her in the eye and says...] Kyousuke: Don't say anything--just go out with me today!! narration: I can't leave her side all day today! Kyousuke FX: 4 [Madoka is startled.] 5 Madoka: [blushing] O-okay... 6 narration: And make sure that Hikaru-chan doesn't find me!! Kyousuke: Place, let me see... Penguin Cafe at six! --------------------------------------------------- p 289 (13) 1 narration: If I don't do this I'll be ruined!! Kyousuke: For sure, now. I'll be there for sure. So wait for me no matter what time it is! 2 Madoka: [soft smile, still blushing] O-okay... 3 [Kyousuke runs off, waving back over his shoulder.] Kyousuke: See you!! soft-drink machine: Be Refreshed Today, Too! Oxy Bicarb. Destroyer G. 4 [Madoka facial portrait--a bit startled.] 5 [Madoka facial portrait--she smiles.] 6 Madoka: But I wonder how he knew it was today. sign: Color TV --------------------------------------------------- p 290 (14) 1 [Late afternoon exterior shot of ABCB.] Master: [off] Ayukawa-kun. 2 [Master holds up a wrapped present as Madoka heads out.] Master: This is a present from my wife and me! 3 Master: Happy birthday. Madoka: [wide-eyed] Oh! 4 Master: My wife and I chose it... We hope you like it. 5 Madoka: Thank you very much. 6 Master: But, you should invite a lot of people and throw a wild party! 7 [His pov of a smiling Madoka.] Master: [off] It's just like you to be so shy... --------------------------------------------------- p 291 (15) 1 [Madoka turns to exit once more, but she stops with eyes grown large when she hears...] Master: But it seems you have much happier plans for yourself... 2 Master: [merrily] Who are you meeting at six? You look so happy... Madoka: [blushing] Master! 3 [Outside, Kyousuke races down the street, past a road crew tearing up the asphalt with jackhammers.] sign: [right] Construction sign: [left, top] Construction warning sign: [left, below] Sorry for the inconvenience traffic cones: Construction 4 [Kyousuke glances at his wristwatch as he runs, unaware that Hikaru has spotted him. She smiles.] jackhammer FX: [off] Kyousuke FX: Hikaru: ! 5 Hikaru: SEMPAI!! narration: Th-this sounds like...?! Kyousuke FX: 6 Hikaru: [ecstatic] I found you! I was looking for you!! [Kyousuke looks unwell.] narration: H-Hikaru-chan...!! --------------------------------------------------- p 292 (16) 1 [He blushes and twiddles his thumbs.] Kyousuke: U-uhh, today, I... 2 Hikaru: Sempai, today I want you... jackhammer FX: Hikaru: ...Madoka-san's... 3 [Hikaru covers her ears against the noise and shouts.] Hikaru: ...birthday present...! jackhammer FX: Kyousuke: Ehhhh?! Whaaat?! 4 [His pov of her as she shouts out the final part of her sentence.] Hikaru: ...to choose. Hikaru FX: to choose" part, our translated English line is hacked into an unnatural construction. Remember, in Japanese sentences, the verb comes last.> 5 [Kyousuke flinches, anxiety written on his face.] Kyousuke FX: 6 [As Kyousuke wobbles behind her, Hikaru stops to ponder, finger to pursed lips.] Hikaru: (Madoka-san was saying that, lately, she had been working every single day at ABCB, so I thought I'd buy a present and go over there with Sempai.) Kyousuke FX: 7 [With a smile, she grabs him by the wrist and races off.] Hikaru: C'mon, let's go!! Hikaru FX: Kyousuke: AH! --------------------------------------------------- p 293 (17) 1 [Exterior evening shot of a corner gift shop.] narration: I couldn't really hear what Hikaru-chan said, but I caught the gist of it! 2 [He stands and thinks. Meanwhile, Hikaru is being helped by a female salesclerk.] narration: If I'm not mistaken, it was "Today I want you to choose between Madoka-san and me..." 3 Kyousuke: [clutching his head] (It's all over!!) narration: Maybe Kazuya carelessly let it slip out or something...!! 4 Kyousuke: (Oh! That's right!!) --------------------------------------------------- p 294 (18) 1 [He looks at his watch, and visualizes asking her out earlier that day.] narration: What about Ayukawa...?! Kyousuke: (Oh no. It's already past six.) Kyousuke: [flashback] Place, let me see... Penguin Cafe at six! 2 [Exterior shot of the entrance to a cafe.] 3 [Madoka sits alone at a table.] 4 [View pans forward. She sits with a smile.] 5 [Back at the shop, he stares over a shoulder at Hikaru who is busy trying to decide what to buy.] narration: The only good thing is that Hikaru-chan doesn't know where Ayukawa is now!! Kyousuke: (But any later than this and she'll probably get angry and go back to ABCB.) 6 [Pov shifts to show Hikaru's fierce expression as she stares at two items held in her hands. Behind her, Kyousuke watches and sweats.] narration: I gotta go soon!! Kyousuke: (But what's she doing here?) Hikaru: (Umm... Which one should I pick?) --------------------------------------------------- p 295 (19) 1 Hikaru: [brightly] Sempai, have you decided yet? [Kyousuke flinches back.] Kyousuke heartbeat FX: 2 narration: I can't decide that quickly!! Hikaru: It looks like you can't decide either. 3 Hikaru: [brightly] Then I'll decide for you. Kyousuke: [aghast] (!!) 4 [She turns to look at a prewrapped gift. Kyousuke calms down a bit and watches her.] Hikaru: Oh, this is one of those mystery gifts where you don't know what's inside until you open it. Then, I'll take it. 5 [Hikaru comes close, smiles softly and gives him a wink.] Hikaru: Please keep it a secret from Madoka-san that I decided! Kyousuke FX: 6 [Hikaru moves off again, to purchase the gift. Kyousuke stares at her with wide-eyed irritation.] Kyousuke: (D-don't just decide on your own like that!!) Hikaru: [to saleslady] Well, we decided on Sempai's so I have to choose mine. 7 Hikaru: It's hard to choose birthday presents, isn't it. 8 [Hikaru slips the prewrapped gift into Kyousuke's jacket pocket, but his attention is on her.] Kyousuke: Ehh?! Whose birthday? Hikaru: Here you go. Madoka-san's. --------------------------------------------------- p 296 (20) 1 [Tight shot of gift items sitting on the shelves.] Kyousuke: [off] WHAAAT?! 2 Kyousuke: Ayukawa's birthday?! Hikaru: Isn't that what I've been saying for some time? You're acting strange, Sempai. 3 [He winces, visualizing flashback scenes of his premonition dream--Hikaru shouting with hands over her ears, and Hikaru slipping close and winking at him.] narration: O-ohh. Then that premonition dream was... 4 narration: Ah! But... Madoka: [flashback] I'm tired of hearing excuses! 5 [He looks at his watch in horror.] Kyousuke: ARRGGHH! IT'S SEVEN!! narration: I'm really in for it now!! 6 [He slips away and runs down the street.] narration: Then, that means she got mad at me because I was late--even though it was her birthday!! Kyousuke FX: 7 Hikaru: Umm, maybe this one's nice, or that one. Oh, this one's nice, too. salesclerk: Excuse me... But it's closing time now... --------------------------------------------------- p 297 (21) 1 [Exterior shot of the Penguin Cafe entrance.] 2 [Madoka still sits at her table.] 3 [View pans forward to show that she's smiling still.] Madoka: (A birthday, huh... Come to think of it, when I was a kid...) 4 [A 4-year-old Madoka has a present handed to her.] Mr. Ayukawa: [off] Happy birthday, Madoka. 5 [She holds a kaleidoscope in her hands and peers inside with a smile.] Mr. Ayukawa: Look inside. What do you see? young Madoka: Wow, pretty! Like a flower garden! 6 [Her father takes a look inside, and Madoka watches him.] narration: Papa can see your future, Madoka! Future? Yeah, like Papa's and Mama's faces, and maybe you can see the face of the wonderful man you'll meet someday! You lie, Papa! I can't see anything! --------------------------------------------------- p 298 (22) 1 [As Papa and Mama watch from outside a door, Madoka sits on the floor inside her room and stares into her toy.] Mrs. Ayukawa: It's like a treasure to her. Mr. Ayukawa: She seems awfully happy with it. 2 [Madoka and an older sister stand and watch their parents leave the house.] Mr. Ayukawa: Madoka, be good. We'll be back in half a year. 3 [Later, her sister kneels on the floor and talks with Madoka.] sister: Papa and Mama are away a lot these days. It's sad, isn't it, Madoka. 4 [Her sister's pov of Madoka as she smiles and holds up her kaleidoscope.] young Madoka: Yeah, but I'm okay! narration: When I have that box of stars, it feels like father and mother are here beside me... 5 [End of flashback. Madoka smiles merrily.] Madoka: That kaleidoscope. I wonder where it is now... 6 [She turns in surprise to see Kyousuke suddenly arrive.] --------------------------------------------------- p 299 (23) 1 [He stands there.] 2 [His pov of her.] 3 [Her pov of him. He lowers his eyes apologetically.] Kyousuke: I-I'm sorry for being late! 4 Kyousuke: I left my house early, but... 5 Madoka: [without expression] And...? 6 Kyousuke: [hanging his head] But on the way, I had something to do... narration: I ask her out and then this. She won't forgive me! --------------------------------------------------- p 300 (24) 1 [Madoka's eyes momentarily shine...] 2 [...and she drops her gaze, looks irritated and tosses her hair back.] Madoka: I'm tired of hearing excuses! 3 Kyousuke: [wincing] (J-just as I expected!!) 4 Madoka FX: 5 Madoka: [happily] I'm just joking! But that boy has been watching us for some time, and looks like he wants to bring us water. waiter FX: 6 Madoka: [beaming] Why don't you sit down ?! 7 Kyousuke: [pleasantly surprised] ......?! narration: That's good. She's not angry! --------------------------------------------------- p 301 (25) 1 [He starts to take his seat...] Kyousuke: (Ah! But I came without bringing a present for her...) 2 [...but stops to pull out the item in his pocket.] narration: Oh, that's right!! 3 Kyousuke: [handing over the gift] Happy birthday!! 4 Madoka: [brightly] Thank you! --------------------------------------------------- p 302 (26) 1 [As Kyousuke apologizes to the waiter, Madoka looks across the table.] Madoka: (It's just like him... I bet it took him a long time to pick this out.) 2 Madoka: Can I open it? Kyousuke: Huh? S-sure, okay... narration: Actually, I don't know what's inside. 3 [Tight shot of Madoka's face as she looks down off-panel at the opened gift.] Madoka: OH, THIS! unwrapping FX: 4 Madoka: [smiling] A KALEIDOSCOPE! [In the background, Madoka visualizes herself at age 4, playing with her toy, and her father, as he looked inside it.] 5 Madoka: [beaming] Wowww! This is just what I wanted! narration: I don't know why, but it seems that she likes it! --------------------------------------------------- p 303 (27) 1 Kyousuke: [looking inside it] Hmmm! The box where you can see the future... Madoka: When I was young I used to believe that I could see the faces of my father and mother, and the person that... 2 Kyousuke: Huh?! And who? 3 Madoka: [blushing] Ah! 4 Madoka: [small smile] It's nothing... 5 [The two share a laugh while Kyousuke looks inside the kaleidoscope.] narration: Thanks to the premonition dream! May 25th... Happy 16th birthday, Ayukawa!! 5(inset) [Kyousuke stares at Madoka and sweats.] Kyousuke: Umm. Kyousuke contemplation FX: narration: But... Ayukawa is a half-year older than me... Madoka: [perplexed] Hmm? ---------------------------------------------------