Kimagure Orange Road "Cheek Sorrow" Volume 1, Story 4 WB Volume 1, Story 4 Written and illustrated by Matsumoto Izumi This script is based on the existent script by Enrique Conty and David Blume. Translation by unknown (pencil annotations found in KOR Volume 1) Original typesetting by : Enrique Conty Additional translation by : David Blume, Craig Nishida Compilation by : Spencer C. Hastings Editing and Additional help by : Paul Hirose Craig Nishida Spencer Hastings Peter Norby Gary Kacmarcik Mats Roger Nielsen Last revision : 11-11-94 NOTE: WBp#'s are printed first, Normal manga pages in parenthesis() NOTE: Translation is done from BOTH the WB and normal manga. So depending on which one you have there may be a few extra items. Examples: The subtitles on page 83 (81) are only in the WB'S! The one-page "Character Profiles" at the ends of the first six chapters are omitted in the WB's! Comments on the revision (CN): A few missing lines and the wideban subtitles were translated, as well as many missing FXs, stutters, exclamations and honorifics. During editing, other lines were modified by the members of the translation team. For the purposes of translating, visual cues were also inserted to allow those without the manga to also contribute to the translation effort. [This script is not intended to be a substitute for the manga; you'd only be cheating yourself...] --------------------------------------------------- p 83 (81)--TITLE PAGE [Madoka stands outdoors in a striped dress, under the shadow of a leafy branch. One hand in her skirt pocket; the other pulls back her hair that's been blown by a breeze.] MAIN TITLE (at top) Cheek Sorrow SUB-TITLE (at bottom) Blowing Over the Sparkle of Spring, a Breeze Sends Her Soft, Silky Hair Flying, and Under the Green Leaves, Her Silhouette Somehow Glitters Dazzlingly. --------------------------------------------------- p 84 (82) 1 [Exterior shot of a school building.] 2 Kyousuke: EHHHH?! A DISCO?! 3 [He holds a push-broom and stops to talk to Komatsu.] Kyousuke: A disco, um... Isn't a disco a place where you pick up girls and take liberties with them?! Komatsu: What sort of way to think is that?! 4 Komatsu: [clearing his throat] Listen! In a place called a "disco" they have a thing called "cheek time". Komatsu FX: 5 [Komatsu gets carried away. His tongue lolls out and he slobbers diabolically.] Komatsu: And at this time bodies slide close, and inside you feel both delight and shame as the night passes on. You make friends with cute girls and do "XX" and "XXX" things with them. It's a place that feels good!! Kyousuke: That's the same thing! 6 Komatsu: [conspiratorially] So, shall we try going tonight? Kyousuke: [indignantly] I'm not going!! --------------------------------------------------- p 85 (83) 1 Komatsu: You're being too frank. Kyousuke: Because we're still in junior high. 2 Kyousuke: Besides, in this school we're not even allowed to go to a coffee shop, much less a disco! If anyone found out that we went, we'd be kicked out of school... 3 Komatsu: Don't worry! Ayukawa and others probably come and go there all the time, but they don't seem concerned. 4 [Kyousuke takes that fact in.] narration: Ayukawa...?! 5 Komatsu: There! Feel better now?! Besides, no matter what you say, there's cheek time!! Cheek time!! Kyousuke: Is that all you can think of?! 6 [Kyousuke visualizes a snuggle-up dance with Madoka.] narration: Cheek time... Hmm... Cheek dancing and Ayukawa seem like a good match... 7 [Continuing to daydream, his face takes on a happy and silly look.] narration: ...and her partner would be... Kyousuke FX: 8 Kyousuke: .......... Well, maybe we can just take a quick peek. Komatsu: [pulling out something from his shirt pocket] Good! It's settled. --------------------------------------------------- p 86 (84) 1 Komatsu: Then, you can take these! Komatsu: It isn't much, but... 2 Kyousuke: [looking at the two items in his hand] What are these? Komatsu: Complimentary disco tickets! 3 Kyousuke: [wide-eyed with surprise] Wha...?! Despite your looks you're considerate, aren't... Huh? 4 [A closeup of one of the tickets.] Ticket: Disco Moebius; "PM5:00 ~ PM12:00"; Ladies Free Complimentary Ticket; "DISCOTHEQUE Moebius" Kyousuke: [off] "Ladies Ticket"?! 5 Komatsu: [grinning and patting Kyousuke on the shoulder] Right. Give them to your sisters! Komatsu: Compliments of Komatsu Seiji. Komatsu hand-on-shoulder FX: Kyousuke: .......... 6 Kyousuke: [angrily] Hey! You're telling me to bring along my sisters? Komatsu: [solemnly] Exactly. 7 [As Kyousuke stares at him in irritation, Komatsu finds an interesting spot on the ceiling to study.] narration: So he invited me in hopes of having Manami and Kurumi come too...! And on top of that, to cheek-dance with them!! 8 Kyousuke: [pushing the tickets back at Komatsu] No way after all!! --------------------------------------------------- p 87 (85) 1 Komatsu: [perplexed] Absolutely "no way"? Kyousuke: NO WAY!! narration: Can't take Kurumi and Manami to a dangerous place like that! 2 Komatsu: As I recall, I thought I heard you say you'd do anything for us after you lost us the basketball game... 3 Kyousuke: Ah...?! Kyousuke: (C-come to think of it!) 4 Komatsu: [pointing the accusing finger] Men should always keep their promises!! Komatsu FX: Kyousuke: [sweating] Ooh! 5 Komatsu: [exiting] Then, I'll wait for you in front of the disco at 7PM...! Kyousuke: H-hey! Wait, Komatsu! 6 [Kyousuke stares at the tickets...] door FX: narration: (That bastard!) 7 [...and turns at a voice coming from outside the window.] Hikaru: [off] Madoka-saaan!! --------------------------------------------------- p 88 (86) 1 Hikaru: [running up to Madoka, who waits leisurely at the gate] Sorry for making you wait. 2 Madoka: Hikaru, what are you doing tonight? You wanna go? Hikaru: [smiling] 'Course! 3 Kyousuke: [blushing, looking out the window] (Ah! That's the girl I ran into before in the hallway...) (Come to think of it, she's always with Ayukawa...) 4 [Kyousuke's pov of Madoka and Hikaru as they talk. He has a perfect view of Hikaru's face.] 5 Kyousuke: [sweating, still blushing] (Even though it was an accident, I hope she's not telling Ayukawa about the kiss.) 6 [Tight shot of Kyousuke's pov of Hikaru as she beams a smile at Madoka.] 7 [His face gets all soft...] Kyousuke: (But now that I see her like this, she's pretty cute...) 8 [He slaps himself on the cheek.] Kyousuke: Ah! This isn't the time to be saying such things! --------------------------------------------------- p 89 (87) 1 [Kyousuke's pov as he enters his apartment. His sisters smile and greet him. Manami is in an apron and serving dinner. Kurumi sits at the table.] Manami and Kurumi: Welcome back! 2 Manami: You're late, oniichan. Kyousuke: I was on the cleanup team. Kurumi: Dinner's ready... 3 Kyousuke: [looking intently at the tickets] Uh... Manami? The dis... Manami: [back to him as she gets the plates] Oh, yes. Dad said he won't be back for 2 or 3 days. 4 Kyousuke: Work? Manami: Yeah. I think so. He told me to give you his regards. 5 narration: I see... narration: Then I've got to look after these two. Manami: [back to Kurumi and Kyousuke] Kurumi, you shouldn't be eating without us! Kurumi heartbeat FX: 6 Kyousuke: I don't think we should go to the disco after all... ...much less do such a thing as cheek dance... Kyousuke contemplation FX: Kurumi: ? 7 Kurumi: [grabbing a ticket from his hands] What's this? Kurumi FX: Kyousuke: Ah, don't do that! --------------------------------------------------- p 90 (88) 1 Kurumi: [wide-eyed with surprise] Zounds! It's a ticket to a disco! 2 Kurumi: Hey hey, Manami-chan! A disco ticket... Look! Kurumi rushing-to-Manami FX: Manami: [pondering] Disco? Kyousuke: [yelling, flush-faced] KURUMI-SAAAAAAN! 3 Manami: [reading the ticket] "Disco 'Moebius'. Ladies Free Complimentary Ticket." [Kurumi waves small Japanese flags in her upraised hands and shouts in glee. From nowhere, party streamers and confetti rain down upon her.] Kurumi: Yayyy! Banzaaai! For free! Hooray!! Kurumi party-popper FX: 4 Kurumi: [pausing in her celebration] So what's for free? Kurumi: What's a "disco?" [Kyousuke and Manami do pratfalls.] 5 [A solid-black panel with a speech bubble.] Kyousuke: [off] Hmmmph. 6 Manami: [elbows on table and hands on her cheeks] Well... I'd kinda like to go, too, but... ...we're still in junior high. Let's go when we're older! The disco won't run away. 7 Kurumi: [in a huff] Hey hey! Whaaat's a "disco"? Whaaat?! Kyousuke: [covering his ears] Looook! Don't start again, you pest! --------------------------------------------------- p 91 (89) 1 [He strikes a pose similar to Komatsu's when he explained what a disco was.] Kyousuke: Listen! A disco is a place with alcohol and the rhythm of rock and where you make friends. Where you feel good...! 2 [He slaps a hand over his mouth, blushes and peeks over at Kurumi.] narration: That didn't come out right... Kurumi: It feels good? 3 Manami: It's a pretty place with lights that sparkle a lot, and you dance and eat. You can eat as much as you want. 4 [Kurumi visualizes what was told to her. In her vision she sits at a table laden with food and drink, knife and fork in her hands. A couple dances behind her.] narration: Bright lights, shiny, and all you can eat...!! Kurumi FX: 5 Kurumi: [in Kyousuke's face] I wanna go! I wanna go!! I wanna go!! Kyousuke: [yelling back] I say no, no, no-o-o-o! 6 Kyousuke: [walking to his room] I'll buy you a takoyaki next time. Kurumi: Oniichan, you stingy bum!! 7 [Kurumi turns and is surprised to see the tickets lying on the table beside her.] --------------------------------------------------- p 92 (90) 1 [A grey panel with a flash speech bubble.] Manami: [off] ONIICHAN! BIG TROUBLE!! 2 Kyousuke: What?! Kurumi's gone?! 3 Manami: [concerned] I heard the door open and when I went to see, Kurumi's shoes were gone. Kyousuke: She went outside? But where... 4 [Both visualize the same thing...] Kurumi flashback: IwannagoIwannagoIwannago! Kyousuke and Manami: Ah! 5 Kyousuke: She... Can't have gone to the disco... Manami: [pointing] But you need a ticket to get in, and the ticket is right here. 6 Manami: [showing the ticket to him] See. Kyousuke: Where's the other one? 7 [Both freeze in the same positions as in the previous panel.] 8 [Criss-cross panel with overlaid speech bubble.] Kyousuke and Manami: [off] THIS IS TERRIBLE! --------------------------------------------------- p 93 (91) 1 [A view down a street filled with nightspots.] sign 1: [right-most] PUB sign 2: Snack Benjamin sign 3: Super-Special Performance: "Tomaho..." sign 4: SHOUNEN JUMP sign 5: Snack sign 6: Girl's sign 7: BAR Noriko sign 8: Snack & Pub "R" sign 9: Stand Firm, Minamoto-san sign 10: Snack Izumi No Pass Ootsubo Live House TORA sign 11: Hamamoto Flower Boutique 2 [Exterior shot of the neon "Disco Moebius" sign over the street-level entrance to the underground disco.] 3 [Kurumi materializes at the top of the stairs.] Kurumi teleport FX: 4 Kurumi foot FX: 5 Kurumi: KYAAAA! Kurumi down-the-stairs FX: 6 Kurumi: [lying on the floor at the foot of the stairs] Wah. Phew. Messed up on the landing! [The bouncer/greeter--a guy in tux and dark glasses--bows respectfully to Kurumi.] 7 [View looking up the stairs. Someone stands just around the corner at the top...] bouncer: [off] Welcome! One guest. --------------------------------------------------- p 94 (92) 1 [It's Komatsu. He stands, leaning back against the wall at street level, and glancing at his watch.] Komatsu: They're late! poster-on-wall: [partially blocked] Looking for a boy for a part-time job! Age... Physical strength... have... Film Production 2 [People on the sidewalk stare at him as they walk by.] Komatsu: .......... crowd FX: 3 Komatsu: I guess he's not coming after all. [Behind him, at the very top of the stairs, 2 figures begin to materialize.] Kyousuke and Manami teleport FX: 4 Kyousuke and Manami teleport FX: [Both look around to make sure they weren't seen. Komatsu is looking down the street the other way.] 5 [They rush down the stairs.] Kyousuke: Did someone see us? Manami: It's all right. 6 bouncer: [now without his tux jacket] Welcome! Kyousuke: Eh?! Ah, thanks. --------------------------------------------------- p 95 (93) 1 [Their pov of the dance floor.] rock music FX: 2 [Manami cringes and pokes fingers into her ears. Kyousuke has a star in his eye--audio overload.] rock music FX: 3 narration: Wh-what noise... 4 Kyousuke: [poking fingers into his ears and yelling] Do you think she's here?! Manami: Anyway, let's look for her! 5 Kyousuke: [pointing] I'll look on this side. Manami, you try that side. Manami: OK! --------------------------------------------------- p 96 (94) 1 Kyousuke: Oh, Manami! Manami: Yes? 2 Kyousuke: [serious look] If someone tries to harm you, you can use the "Power"! 3 [Manami considers...] 4 [...then winks and flashes him a "V" sign with her left hand.] Manami: Okay, gotcha! 5 [Panels 5-6 show various patrons dancing. One's a guy in a mohawk.] narration: But, a disco... 6 narration ...is awesome. 7 narration: Fr-frightening! [Not watching where he's going, he bumps into a girl with short hair...] Kyousuke FX: 8 Hikaru: [turning angrily] Hey, watch out, man! Kyousuke: Oh, sorry! --------------------------------------------------- p 97 (95) 1 [Kyousuke stares, wide-eyed.] 2 [Hikaru stares back, wide-eyed.] 3 [Kyousuke sweats, Hikaru cringes, and both blush.] Kyousuke and Hikaru: AH! 4 [View from overhead looking down at the dance floor.] narration: Oo-ooh! D-darling!! 5 Hikaru: [smiling and blushing] (Hmm... Though he doesn't look the type, he's here at a disco?!) Kyousuke: [searching about] (If she's here, maybe...) Hikaru: (This is awesome!!) 6 Kyousuke: Did you come here alone? Hikaru: [flushed and smiling] Ah, no. 7 Hikaru: [pointing] I'm with Sempai . You know... Madoka-san! Look. Over there... --------------------------------------------------- p 98 (96) 1 [Madoka sits alone in a booth, sipping a drink, dressed in a minidress.] 2 Kyousuke: [flash thought] (She's here after all?) 3 Hikaru: [grabbing him by the arm] Sayyy! Won't you dance?! Kyousuke: [flustered] Eh?! Ah! No, that's not what I came here for. 4 [Meanwhile...] Manami FX: 5 [...Manami finds Kurumi sitting at a table, working on a pizza.] Kurumi FX: Manami: Ah! 6 Manami: KURUMI! Kurumi FX: 7 Manami: [grabbing her by the arm] Caught you! Well, let's go home. You're not running away again. C'mon, let's go home now. Let's go home. [Kurumi beats on her chest, trying to dislodge something in her throat.] Kurumi FX: Kurumi chest-pounding FX: --------------------------------------------------- p 99 (97) 1 [View of the dance floor. The dancers pause as the music winds down to something with a slower tempo...] music FX: 2 guy 1: Hey! 3 guy 2 (mohawk): Oh! 4 [Kyousuke pauses...] guy 3: It's Cheek Time! crowd FX: 5 [...and he swivels his head about as all the couples get close and comfortable.] narration: Wh-what...?! 6 Hikaru: (Oh, that looks nice!) Hikaru FX: 7 [She considers Kyousuke with a thoughtful smile.] narration: That's right! This is the chance to get close to Darling! Hikaru contemplation FX: --------------------------------------------------- p 100 (98) 1 [She glides up against his chest...] Hikaru movement FX: 2 [...and rests her cheek against it. Her hair tickles his nose.] Hikaru hair FX: 3 Kyousuke: [flash thoughts] (Wha! Wha... What!) Kyousuke heartbeat FX: 4 Hikaru: [looking up at him] Do you know how to cheek dance? Kyousuke: Eh?! N-no... 5 Hikaru: It's easy. Look. You go like this... Hikaru hand-on-shoulder FX: 6 [...and she goes "like this"...] Hikaru and Kyousuke torsos FX: 7 [...and she wraps an arm up and around his neck.] Hikaru and Kyousuke FX: [Kyousuke blushes deeply.] crows-in-the-background FX: --------------------------------------------------- p 101 (99) 1 narration: Ohh! Sh-she smells good. Sorta sweet and sour. narration: Aah! My head feels like it's turning to jelly... 2 [Sweating, palpitating...] narration: I-I give up. Oh, god...! 3 narration: What in the world did I come here for?! [He looks up and over...] Kyousuke FX: 4 [...at Madoka, who's finally spotted them. She looks quite surprised.] 5 [Pov shifts to view over Madoka's shoulder.] 6 Kyousuke: [peeking over at Madoka] (Ayukawa's looking this way... It shouldn't matter, but I kind of feel bad.) 7 [Madoka watches...] Madoka ice-in-drink FX: --------------------------------------------------- p 102 (100) 1 [...and takes a healthy swallow from her glass.] 2 Kyousuke: (Ayukawa looks like she's in a very bad mood...!) 3 [A guy sits next to Madoka and puts an arm around her shoulders.] sleazy guy: Heya babe... Are you _alone_? Wanna dance?! 4 [Kyousuke watches in horror.] narration: ! 5 Madoka: [glancing Kyousuke's way] Well... Madoka FX: 6 Madoka: [getting up and setting glass down] Okay. Madoka sit-up & drink FXs: 7 [Kyousuke watches as Madoka and sleazebag cheek-dance.] narration: Wha...! What's this...?!! sleazy guy: You're cute. What's your name? --------------------------------------------------- p 103 (101) 1 [Kyousuke's pov of Madoka and sleazebag.] narration: Ayukawa...! W-with that creep?!! 2 [Tight shot of Madoka's closed eyes.] 3 [Overhead view looking down at the two couples. Imaginary spotlights shine down on them and isolate them from the rest of the crowd.] narration: That goes the same for me. narration: Cheek dancing like this in front of Ayukawa. narration: I have no right to complain about her, but... 4 [The twins chow down.] Kurumi: Isn't this pizza delicious? Manami: We're going home after this one! Kurumi and Manami FX: 5 [While, outside, Komatsu runs afoul of the law...] policeman: What are you doing here? Aren't you in junior high? Komatsu: [embarrassed] Ahh. No. That is... --------------------------------------------------- p ** (102) <**This page does not appear in the wideban version.> [Half-portrait of a wide-eyed Kurumi in a sweater.] Title: Character Profile Kurumi: Kasuga Kurumi Kouryou Junior High School, 1st year. I a-a-a-am...! Twin sister of Manami-chan. Favorite food? Takoyaki, shortcake, and omelette rice. To tell you the truth, I'm smart! ---------------------------------------------------